Kevin and Jillian

• I really liked the conversation aspect of it and the back and forth....especially in the final draft.
• It was broken up into nice even paragraphs and was well organized. 
• You both have very distinct personalities in your writing and it really brought the conversation together. 
  • Even in the first draft, when it wasn't labeled, you could still tell the difference in your writing voices.
• The definition aspect of the piece was extremely well executed. 
  • There is a lot that goes into defining an entire "world" (I've had friends who have played, I understand the complexities).  You did a great job of honing in on key terms and aspects of the game and allowed them to develop to the reader. 
  • I liked that you had 3 or 4 terms you used throughout, then you would almost concentrate on a new term in each part of the conversation. 
  • It allowed the reader to collect and organize the termonology in their head easily which in turn can make the reading of the piece easier.

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Dylan Adams