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Midterm Reflection unit assignment prompt
Link your drafts and peer reviews here:
1.Lydia
2.Dylan K.
3.Jacob
Sue (review 2) I read your paper in class
1.Lydia
2.Earl
Rough Draft Review
Graded Peer Review-
Michele, you definitely got a interesting paper on you hands. You provide me with some very colorful visuals in regards to interacting with our fellow gamer through online play. You provide clear examples of how online game play are advantageous and essential to today’s gamer. You touched on a point that I’ve always wondered. Why do people think it’s acceptable to drop racial slurs while playing online games? That’s a case study waiting to happen. Anyways, your paper had some B traits to it. I feel that some of the paragraphs needed to be cleaned up a little but overall you got an A. Good job.
3.Jacob
4. Aldijana (in class review)
5. Kristie Unit 2
6. Tracy's Reviews
1.Dylan K.
2.Jacob
3.Paul
Jillian (same as world of warcraft link below?)
1.Michele's review here
2. Tracy's Reviews
3. Dylan A.
1.Earl
Rough Draft Review
Graded Review-
Great paper Paul. You definitely establish your stance and your thesis that TV violence leads to violent tendencies amongst our youth. You utilize all the artistic appeals throughout the paper especially when it comes to your statistical analysis (logos). All your paragraphs transition to make the flow of the paper logical and clear. A paper.
2.Dylan K.
3. Nathan's Unit Two Reviews
Sue (review 2 ) under peer reviews
1.Michele's review here
2. Dylan Adams
3. Kristie Unit 2
1.Earl
Rough Draft Review
Graded Review-
Great paper Aldijana. Your paper provides very clear informative information on how the internet can be used as a weapon against children and teens. You provide a lot of facts about warning signs that are backed up by legitimate sources. You appeal to my pathos because being a older brother of a twelve year old and a father of a six year old, I feel a need to definitely monitor what they do around a computer because of the fear that you place within me when describing the sick predators that are looking to harm children. You got an A.
2.Paul
3.Michele's Review here
4. Tracy's Reviews
1.Michele's Review here
2. Nathan's Unit Two Reviews
3.Dylan A Peer Review unit 2
4. David
Jacob work in progress
1. Dylan Adams
2. Aldijana
3. Lydia
1. Kristie Unit 2
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3.
1. Nathan's Unit Two Reviews
2. Aldijana
3. David
Causal Argument Dylan A
1. Paul
2. Lydia
3. David
Sue (review 2) under peer reviews
Kristie Causal Argument Rough Draft
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Nancy and Tracy
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(We didn't realize our paper wasn't posted in this section until now. So please review if you can. Thank you!)
Connect, cut, and reconnect words, sound, images, and ideas.
consult this Connexions module, populate your paragraphs with characters and actions
tab this tabla
and listen as you read and remember
Select any paragraph from the peer draft you are reading. As you read focus your attention on the voice of the language. Do you find active configurations? Or passive constructions? This week, when we review each others' drafts, we have to be free to critique and open to suggestions. Identifying shifts in voice--from active to passive, and back again--can help you begin a conversation about the effectiveness of a peer's writing. If you find a paragraph in a peer's draft that "just doesn't seem right," read it aloud. Does the voice seem to shift randomly from active to passive voice, or does the writer seem to use voice to shift emphasis and direct your attention in order to amplify a particular argumentative pattern or point?
Experience grammatical voice as a rhetorical choice. Ask and answer these two questions:
who's the agent? Place this main character in the subject position (the beginning of your sentence)
what is the primary action performed by the agent, or main character? Place this verb immediately following the character performing the action
Perform this algorithm on your most recently composed paragraph in your definition, or on a portion of your narrative, or peer narratives and blogs. Then, read the results aloud. Finally, shift your attention to the paragraph's specific purpose, imagine it in a larger argument or final project. Revise back into the passive voice when it helps emphasize your paragraph's overall rhetorical purpose.
Focus: transitions!
Now, look for transitions...will your readers see your sequence of ideas?
Crucial resources for rough draft workshop
Clarity from Joseph Williams and Gregory Columb's Style The Connexions module is based on this text.
Open Office and Neo Office - free open source software that replaces Word, Excel, Powerpoint etc.
speed up open office tips from lifehacker.com
koffice also like Microsoft Word, but free
Craig Waddell's free prose mechanics this free grammar guide and style manual covers the basics
Elements of Style, a classic
3 modules on clear writing style at Rice's Connexions, a creative commons of learning modules, online texts, and courses.
nonlinear adding machine got writer's block? Chisel it up, go on a syntactical "derive," find your "un-voice" See also: Ractor, chatterbots, etc
Widget Library! this "scriptorium" shares (java) scripts for making our wiki sizzle. F'shizzle!
html color codes plug these #ers into css templates to customize your pages. Recall Kristie's points about the rhetorical force of light and color.
Radio Free ShareRiff - podcasted feedback for unit one from herr professor
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