Tracy's Graded Peer Reviews

reviewed different papers because there were more than three for the papers that I previously looked at.

Sue

I thought your paper was really informative. There was a lot of good information in there. I especially like the beginning where you gave background information in the intro paragraph, it set the mood for the paper. I like that you used specific examples in your paper to show the percentage of unwanted children and crime. It's sad to see how many children were actually unwanted throughout the whole pregnancy and even after they were born and it's also sad to see that abortion has become a huge form of birth control for these mothers. You used great facts and supported all your ideas and wrote your paper in an organized way. Although it's a difficult and controversial topic, I still wanted to read your paper because it is a totally different topic than all of the other ones in the class, including my own. Looks to me like you added a lot more in your final draft which is always a good improvement. Your paper deserves an A.

Nathan

I'm not really into comics so I didn't know much about them and the way these companies operate until I read your paper. As a marketing major I enjoy learning new things about companies and how they market their product, in this case comics. I like that you compared the two companies and their marketing strategies in such detail. I never knew that they were on social networking pages such as Myspace, Facebook, and Twitter. I might have to look out for them now! You wrote in a way that all readers can understand and many writers can relate to. Your thesis statement was clear and it made it easy to know what the paper was going to be about. You had great research and it shows that you took a lot of time to find important information that would apply to the topic of your paper. I think you should get an A.

Earl

When I first read your title I was a bit confused! Usually parents try to steer their children away from video games, but after reading your paper I see why it's a good idea to allow them to play certain games. I feel like I was getting a health lesson and I was defintely sold on a couple games. Again, the Wii was thrown into your paper and it's making me want it more and more, especially because of the aerobic exercise and anaerobic fitness that comes from that gaming system. This paper is great for parents who are struggling with their children's weight because it shows a really good way to help their children and still allow them to have fun. With the amount of information you've given the reader, shows that you took a lot of time to research different games and gaming systems. Your paper was very clear and organized. The topic was clearly definied in the opening paragraph. This is an A paper for sure!