The grades for the Definitional Arguement Paper

Definitional Argument - Aldijana

-Paul

Aldijana, I think your paper is well written and researched. You provide many examples and points of view on the pros and cons of teens and children using the internet and computers in their daily lives. There are just a couple of grammatical errors, but overall I think you have expressed your argument and thesis statement very well within your writing. Also the paper flows from point to point very easily. Grade: A

mynameisEarl_unit1

-Paul

Earl's paper on how the Wii video system is beneficial to the senior population is well written and supported. Earl explains how some of the games can be used to increase the social activities of people who are often put into these homes and forgotten about. His paper also shows how the elderly are using new technology to stay active and keep up on their cognitive skills. The paper flows smoothly and is structured well. I wonder if there are any studies that show if any of these elderly people are getting injured by using the Wii for occupational therapy? I think Earl meets all the requirements of an A paper. Overall Grade: A

Michele's Definitional Paper

-Paul

I thought Michele's Paper was very well researched and written. The thesis statement was not as clear in the beginning of the paper but was well supported when describing the game Second Life. The reasoning and content behind her argument is strong and there are numerous examples supporting the argument (attepting to define reality as it pertains to the virtual world). Michele has structured and organized the paper so that it reads easily, but some of the transitions were hard to follow. Grade: A