To Jillian & Kevin:

     I enjoyed reading the sort of second to final piece. Not having to do with the grade, but breaking it up on your page into paragraphs would make it easier to read. I believe that this paper has progressed a lot from your original draft, the one that I read in class. It is somewhat clearer, but I think there was a problem uploading the FINAL final draft so I'll hold out until tomorrow. I understand, I also am a terrible procrastinator. ;) -->Okay, here's the real deal! I love how it's cut up now so that the reader can tell who they're reading. It's much easier to understand and you simplified the lingo a lot. It's come a loooooong way from the original and I think that it now describes WOW very well. You guys covered everything that I, as a fellow player, know and love about WOW, but still in a way that would help someone who didn't know about the game to understand it better. Well written, and well edited, you really used our workshopping class wonderfully. A  (Thank You Michele, much of my changes were based on your advice! (o: JL)

To Lydia:

      This paper certainly got A LOT bigger. :) I'm glad to have read the finished piece. It's a strong paper with a lot of good description. I like that there are pros and cons for both vinyl and digital; it is not a one-sided fight. There is a lot to be learned and digested. My dad listens to vinyl all the time and a lot of people don't understand the difference in the sound. I think Lydia really helped describe how the two are different and why vinyl cannot die because it just isn't the same as digital. Also, there were tons of facts about the methods in which these different forms of music are played and where they came from. Lydia captured the differences in sound and, if simplified a tiny bit for people who do not know anything about vinyl, this piece could be a wonderful way to introduce vinyl to those who have grown up with only digital. I found it well written and interesting. A

 To Nathan:

     Glad to see the piece all finished! As a huge comic book fan, I make a good audience for this piece. The history of the comic companies was accurate and didn't draw itself out. I would have liked to see a little bit less about individual characters and more about the feud, maybe from the points of view of other fans who do pick a side in the feud, and how/why they picked their sides. The essay is well put together and cohesive. There are good examples given for both comic book companies that better illustrate the differences between the two. Overall, the paper has few errors and is an easy and interesting piece to sit back and read. A-

To Dylan & David:

      I think I know why this paper may not have gotten peer-reviewed. It's very intimidating without either paragraphs or spaces between the paragraphs. Once I got past that point though, it was pretty interesting. We all have a general idea of what propaganda is, but this paper explains it in more than one light while still holding its point that propaganda is immoral. There were almost no grammatical errors, although the transitions between (what I think were) separate paragraphs could have been cleaner to help the general flow of the paper. The definitions of propaganda and its devices was done very well, but some of the examples used were a little confusing, not in content, but in how they were described. Overall, the paper was well written with very few errors, and contained a lot of information on the topic. A- 

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